Today, I'm going to talk about KONY2012. First watch the movie
So, what do you think? do you think you have to join it?Isn't it surprising that human can be that cruel? Farther more, kony does that to children in Africa. This kind of things
happen in the world many times. I have only one question, Why? Why are their doing this unbelievable things? Because they hate government? or other reason why their doing this is because people always says "It doesn't matter if it's not me" that foolish thought made human world this. Now then, what, Should we do now?
at that movie Jason want us which is teenagers, to donate to TRI.
In my opinion we should wait until we grow up and then do something. Doings things now maybe cause problem.
I wish you guise were impressed by this short article.
Thanks for reading.
Hi. Your writing TA Sohyeon here.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your piece, and I hope everyone was impressed as I was. I think you should work on lengthening your essays. I believe the question given was somewhere along the lines of, do you support or do you not support KONY 2012? Your essay does not answer that question directly. To answer that question, only asking the 'one question' why will not suffice. Also, if you want to say that doing things now will cause problems, you want to also say what kind of problems will be caused. You need to explain yourself. Try looking at the other people's work and in the future, be more explanatory and specific. :)